A Lost Love
“Hi!” He whistled as he wandered into my room.
“Who let you in?” I growled, my unhappiness at his appearance quite obvious.
“Well, you had left the door open, you know”, he shrugged.
He took a look at me, sitting defeated on my bed, and said, “You’ve been to see him, haven’t you?”
I was silent.
“Well?”
“You know the answer, don’t you? Yes, I had been to see him”.
“And?”
“You know the answer to that too”.
“Still pining for him? After all these years?”
I was silent again.
“I was there, you know. I saw it all”.
“I know you did”.
“The first time you saw him, you thought – Here’s the guy I’m going to marry! You never believed in love at first sight till then. You didn’t believe in romance either. But then, you were not a typical girl. You never had been one. Always a tomboy. Always hanging out with the guys, your buddies. He was different. You felt feminine with him. But he treated you just like another of his buddies. Part of the gang. And that hurt – hurt like hell, didn’t it?”
I nodded, biting my lip.
“And then, when he starting dating that other girl, you actually cried. You sobbed your heart out in your room. I was there, you know.”
“Yes, I know”.
“How many years has it been since you last met?”
“6 years, I think”.
“That’s quite a long time, isn’t it?”
“Yes, I thought so too”, I replied. “I thought it would be fine –much water and all that. But the moment I laid eyes on him and his beautiful (and intelligent) wife, it all came back”. I closed my eyes and took a deep breath.
“It’s bad, isn’t it? To lose in love?” His hand was on my shoulder, and his eyes were sympathetic.
“Yes, it is.” My eyes brimmed with sudden tears.
“Come to me, dear, come to me”, he murmured, as he stroked my hair gently. I let out a loud sob, and embraced Payne tightly. He slowly dissolved and seeped into my skin, piercing my heart with a long, cold stab.
4 Comments:
How Come my love stories are not dealt with as sympathetically ! sheesh !! and to think they're just friends!
thanks, doh and ssm for ur comments.
ssm, i can never make up my mind on whether to comment on comments, coz i'm never sure they will be read! :))
anyway, this was actually a true life incident (yes, another one - too many true life stories popping up and screaming to be blogged!), so that's why no drooling over sandhya mridul types :)))
i was toying with the treatment of the story since morning, and guess what, my initial draft did have "embraced him tightly" - changed it to Payne at the final post!!
btw, am very happy that it got critiqued!!
yeah...me too with ssm...nice piece ano, but the "payne" bit seems like trying to make sure we all "get" it...a little put-off-ish...:-))
buck u absolutely hit the nail on the head - that was my clumsy "get-it-all" attempt!!
welcome sharky - now how do i answer ur question? where do i begin... *scratches head*
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